2011年3月14日 星期一
A Wonderful Trip
Last Sunday, I had a wonderful trip which is in my mind forever. I woke up early as usual. After I got up, my parents told me that we had a family trip. I didn't expect it at all because my parents always visit old friends for a family trip. Hence, I wasn't happy then. On the way to our destination, I saw a lot of scenery that I had never seen. After we arrived at the destination, I was surprised. My parents took us to an amusement park. I was nothing but excited at that moment. In the amusement park, the first facility I played was the Roller Coaster. It make me not only excited but frightened. Also, I had taken the Spinging Tea Cups. After I took it, I feel disgusted. In the amusement park, it was an unforgettable experience. Although I feel tired after I went home, I still couldn't forget it. To sum up, I had a wonderful trip last Sunday. I though that I would never feel bored when my parents told me that we had a family trip.
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because my parents always visit old friends for a family trip....visited
回覆刪除I though that I would never feel bored when my parents told me that we had a family trip.
...這具是想表達什麼意思呢?
I though that ...是我雖然怎樣怎樣嗎?
不過當做結尾好像怪怪的?
After I took it, I feel disgusted
回覆刪除Although I feel tired
時態要注意
I though that 應該是thought
沒有很仔細描述wonderful 的點在哪
an amusement park 要用形容詞ㄅ
回覆刪除I was nothing but excited at that moment
這句話離譜喔 變成你什麼都不是!!! 應該是 felt nothing
It make me not only excited but frightened
時態
After I took it, I feel disgusted 一樣是時態
I though that 是thought喔
說實在的 不好融入你的文章情境
應該可以再寫的更生動或好玩一點
It's pretty good but if you can describe your feelings more, it would look better.
回覆刪除And the sentence about the tea shop?
I think that sentence is a little..unnecessary.
The speech is not bad anyway!
It make me not only excited but frightened
回覆刪除made?
In the amusement park, it was an unforgettable experience
這句怪怪的 還有 呃 難忘的經驗是做轉轉杯做到很噁心嗎
Spinging Tea Cups? 有拼錯嗎?
though是thought ?