2011年3月14日 星期一

A Wonderful Trip

Last Sunday, I had a wonderful trip which is in my mind forever.  I woke up early as usual.  After I got up, my parents told me that we had a family trip.  I didn't expect it at all because my parents always visit old friends for a family trip.  Hence, I wasn't happy then.  On the way to our destination, I saw a lot of scenery that I had never seen.  After we arrived at the destination, I was surprised.  My parents took us to an amusement park.  I was nothing but excited at that moment.  In the amusement park, the first facility I played was the Roller Coaster.  It make me not only excited but frightened.  Also, I had taken the Spinging Tea Cups.  After I took it, I feel disgusted.  In the amusement park, it was an unforgettable experience.  Although I feel tired after I went home, I still couldn't forget it.  To sum up, I had a wonderful trip last Sunday.  I though that I would never feel bored when my parents told me that we had a family trip.

5 則留言:

  1. because my parents always visit old friends for a family trip....visited


    I though that I would never feel bored when my parents told me that we had a family trip.
    ...這具是想表達什麼意思呢?
    I though that ...是我雖然怎樣怎樣嗎?
    不過當做結尾好像怪怪的?

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  2. After I took it, I feel disgusted
    Although I feel tired
    時態要注意
    I though that 應該是thought

    沒有很仔細描述wonderful 的點在哪

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  3. an amusement park 要用形容詞ㄅ

    I was nothing but excited at that moment
    這句話離譜喔 變成你什麼都不是!!! 應該是 felt nothing

    It make me not only excited but frightened
    時態

    After I took it, I feel disgusted 一樣是時態

    I though that 是thought喔

    說實在的 不好融入你的文章情境
    應該可以再寫的更生動或好玩一點

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  4. It's pretty good but if you can describe your feelings more, it would look better.
    And the sentence about the tea shop?
    I think that sentence is a little..unnecessary.
    The speech is not bad anyway!

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  5. It make me not only excited but frightened
    made?

    In the amusement park, it was an unforgettable experience

    這句怪怪的 還有 呃 難忘的經驗是做轉轉杯做到很噁心嗎

    Spinging Tea Cups? 有拼錯嗎?

    though是thought ?

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