In Taiwan schools, students must need to wear uniform when they go to school, or you will be punished for schools’ rules. In my opinion, I disagree with wearing uniform when we go to school everyday. However, teachers are on the same page as those who agree with students should wear uniform in school. Some are against that we can wear flexible clothes when we go to school. But those who are critical of this idea think that students should follow schools’ rules and be normal. Especially, I object to wear uniform when we go to school because I feel uncomfortable in summer. The teachers are in favor of wearing uniform because students should keep good appearance. While it is true that we still must wear uniform when we go to school, I believe that we shouldn’t wear uniform for as the time is changing, our opinion are different.
must wear 就可以了
回覆刪除提出的論點太少了
多半是敘述
多一點會更好!
In Taiwan schools
回覆刪除你根本完全中文英文阿
must need to 用need to 就可以了
我覺得disagree 後要先加一個名詞 在用形容詞子句補充說明會比較好
你敘述的方法太直接了
你都沒說為什麼不好 就只是一直說不要穿制服
連唯一的原因也是自己覺得舒服
要多一點論點
然後相同的字詞出現好多次
everyday 要分開吧?
回覆刪除teachers are on the same page 這啥?
沒什麼議論文的感覺 就敘述比較多
應該是說你的觀點跟老師同學其他人沒什麼關係吧
in Taiwan schools,...改一下吧^^
回覆刪除其他的就還好啦
Taiwan schools 什麼鬼
回覆刪除must need to 冗辭
要說自己的原因
老師那個有點看不懂