There are two important Americans, John Adams and Tomas Jefferson. Both John and Tomas died in July 4, 1826. On the one hand, John Adams was important person in the American Revolution. Similarly, Thomas Jeffereson played important role in American Revolution. On the other hand, John delegated to theContinental Congress. Likewise, Thomas also delegated to the Continental Congress. Moreover, John was signer of Declaration of Independence, and so was Tomas. They were both U.S. president before. John studied and practiced law as sams as Tomas did.
還不錯 不過沒有結論句
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有一點突然斷掉的感覺
大致上還不錯
in July 4, 1826 =>on
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played important role =>+an
and so was Tomas=>Thomas
as sams as Tomas did. 有點奇怪
died on
回覆刪除我覺得你用on the one hand那個沒意義
然後最後一句怎會有as same as這句法?
died in ...died on
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played important role
單複數哦?
as sams as Tomas did....same
可是真的怪怪的...
Similarly, Thomas Jeffereson played important role in American Revolution. --> played "an" important role 你的an 不見摟~~
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最後可以加上To sum up+我覺得這真是太巧了!!