2011年4月27日 星期三

Comparing-1

There are two important Americans, John Adams and Tomas Jefferson.  Both John and Tomas died in July 4, 1826.  On the one hand, John Adams was important person in the American Revolution.  Similarly, Thomas Jeffereson played important role in American Revolution.  On the other hand, John delegated to theContinental Congress.  Likewise, Thomas also delegated to the Continental Congress.  Moreover, John was signer of Declaration of Independence, and so was Tomas.  They were both U.S. president before.  John studied and practiced law as sams as Tomas did.

6 則留言:

  1. 還不錯 不過沒有結論句

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  2. on+date
    少了結論句
    有一點突然斷掉的感覺
    大致上還不錯

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  3. in July 4, 1826 =>on

    was important person =>an important person
    played important role =>+an

    and so was Tomas=>Thomas

    as sams as Tomas did. 有點奇怪

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  4. died on

    我覺得你用on the one hand那個沒意義

    然後最後一句怎會有as same as這句法?

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  5. died in ...died on

    was important person
    played important role
    單複數哦?

    as sams as Tomas did....same
    可是真的怪怪的...

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  6. Similarly, Thomas Jeffereson played important role in American Revolution. --> played "an" important role 你的an 不見摟~~
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    最後可以加上To sum up+我覺得這真是太巧了!!

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